Why would you do drugs and alcohol when you could just go out and buy better things, like water and snacks? Basically, you are just hurting your own body by doing drugs. I live a healthy lifestyle by exercising, eating healthy, and not doing drugs! You can do the same thing as me when you live a healthy lifestyle that includes healthy food, going outside, and again, NOT DOING DRUGS!
Sonia from Monticello, New York tells her story to lifeafter.drugfree.com. “I grew up in a home where I was taught the dangers of drugs and alcohol. My friends started doing it. They talked about it all the time and they told me how great it was. They told me to try it. Eventually, I did try it because of peer pressure and out of curiosity.” says Sonia. This story shows how peer pressure can come to you and your classmates and even friends can talk you into doing drugs and alcohol. Don’t let them talk you into it.
Doing drugs is addictive, when you do it once, sometimes you can’t even stop drinking and smoking. You could do it for 20 years and you wouldn’t even stop.
Lots of people around the world do drugs, but I never will. I want to live a long, healthy life full of wonderful things. Now and in future.
Good beginning, Abbie, but I really think you could add a lot more to it. I'm not sure what grade you're in, but this essay sounds like the start of a 4th or 5th grade free-style essay to me. Some of the things you can improve on are your essay structure(intro, 3 body paragraphs, and conclusion), incorporating more textual evidence, as well as providing more supports, and learning to INTEGRATE your quotes instead of just dropping them into the paragraph. Wish you the best and hope this helped! :) :)
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